02-08-2004, 07:28 PM
I am working on it but ideas dont come that fast. i have a few but any that people can give will be welcome. I hope everyone is enjoying this as much as i am. It's nice to have a chance to be descriptive for once.
02-08-2004, 07:28 PM
02-08-2004, 11:34 PM
Kain Wrote:I am working on it but ideas dont come that fast. i have a few but any that people can give will be welcome. I hope everyone is enjoying this as much as i am. It's nice to have a chance to be descriptive for once.
Well, I am sure enjoying it. It's awesome so far!
I can always wait untill you write more.03-08-2004, 12:05 AM
this is brilliant stuff, very atmospheric, im loving it.
i was thinkin, how about wen u eventually get down to the island that u get into an area where the force is completely surrounded, no tp left and the monsters are homing in for the kill, BAM kain steps in, throws over a Trifluid and together u beat these monsters.
and how about the force being a little sinister, maybe theres more to him than meets the eye. why was he in the ruins? why did he leave b4 u woke up? theres sum very cool possobilitys with this. keep writing
i was thinkin, how about wen u eventually get down to the island that u get into an area where the force is completely surrounded, no tp left and the monsters are homing in for the kill, BAM kain steps in, throws over a Trifluid and together u beat these monsters.
and how about the force being a little sinister, maybe theres more to him than meets the eye. why was he in the ruins? why did he leave b4 u woke up? theres sum very cool possobilitys with this. keep writing
03-08-2004, 09:26 AM
Thanks for the input guys i'll be writing the next section today so be sure to check back.
03-08-2004, 10:18 AM
am not into it myself it aint pratchett or tolkien but it seems to be enjoyed by afew congrats pal.
03-08-2004, 02:43 PM
Kain Wrote:Thanks for the input guys i'll be writing the next section today so be sure to check back.
Your welcome!
Always glad to help. Well, I am so looking forward to reading more soon.04-08-2004, 01:07 PM
Heres the next section, hope you like it!
Kain left the hospital within an hour of waking up. His face was locked in determination, he had a mission to do, and he was going to do it. He knew were the lab was, it was one of the biggest buildings on the ship but he didn't know how to get in. Very few people seemed to enter or leave from what he had heard but there had to be a way to get in. As it was a government run building he was sure it would be covered in guards and security. Maybe he would get to fight, Kain thought hopefully.
Later outside the lab Kain waited in the shadows for some sign of activity from inside. For an hour and a half nothing moved but then, on the third floor he heard a muffled scream. Not quite the sign he had been waiting for but good enough. He whipped out a pair of old fashioned metal daggers and jabbed them into the wall to begin the climb. By the time he reached the third floor his arms felt like they would fall out of their sockets if he put his arms down. Scrambling through a tiny vent ,which he now realised was how he had heard the sound, Kain was in the lab. He jumped out into a dark room with dim, red flashing lights. The lighting made Kain nauseas and his vision began to blur. He couldn't understand what was going on but he had to get out of this room. His eyes darted around for an exit and found the open door to his right. He burst out into a almost blindingly bright white corridor with guards to his left and right.
"ahh shit," said the already weak and tired Kain,
Before he knew it photon shots were flying everywhere. Whether he liked it or not Kain was going to have to fight. His instinct kicked in and he drew his blade, as did the guards. The static 'hum' of the blades filled the air. Kain took a low slash at the left guard's legs which he seemingly dodged with inhuman speed. From behind he heard the swish of a saber and dropped to the floor, taking another lunge at the guards legs, this time hitting him just above the knee. The guard buckled to the floor in a crying wreck as Kain turned, full speed to hit the guard behind him clean in the chest. Both guards were crippled and helpless as Kain ran off down the corridor to find the teleporter. Skidding round a corner Kain saw the teleporter ahead of him and began to sprint toward it, he could hear the buzz of bullets behind him as countless guards dived out of rooms. He jumped through the closing security door to the transporter and into the electric rays. He felt the familiar sense of being pulled in a direction he didn't know existed as he was sent down to Gal Da Va island.
Kain left the hospital within an hour of waking up. His face was locked in determination, he had a mission to do, and he was going to do it. He knew were the lab was, it was one of the biggest buildings on the ship but he didn't know how to get in. Very few people seemed to enter or leave from what he had heard but there had to be a way to get in. As it was a government run building he was sure it would be covered in guards and security. Maybe he would get to fight, Kain thought hopefully.
Later outside the lab Kain waited in the shadows for some sign of activity from inside. For an hour and a half nothing moved but then, on the third floor he heard a muffled scream. Not quite the sign he had been waiting for but good enough. He whipped out a pair of old fashioned metal daggers and jabbed them into the wall to begin the climb. By the time he reached the third floor his arms felt like they would fall out of their sockets if he put his arms down. Scrambling through a tiny vent ,which he now realised was how he had heard the sound, Kain was in the lab. He jumped out into a dark room with dim, red flashing lights. The lighting made Kain nauseas and his vision began to blur. He couldn't understand what was going on but he had to get out of this room. His eyes darted around for an exit and found the open door to his right. He burst out into a almost blindingly bright white corridor with guards to his left and right.
"ahh shit," said the already weak and tired Kain,
Before he knew it photon shots were flying everywhere. Whether he liked it or not Kain was going to have to fight. His instinct kicked in and he drew his blade, as did the guards. The static 'hum' of the blades filled the air. Kain took a low slash at the left guard's legs which he seemingly dodged with inhuman speed. From behind he heard the swish of a saber and dropped to the floor, taking another lunge at the guards legs, this time hitting him just above the knee. The guard buckled to the floor in a crying wreck as Kain turned, full speed to hit the guard behind him clean in the chest. Both guards were crippled and helpless as Kain ran off down the corridor to find the teleporter. Skidding round a corner Kain saw the teleporter ahead of him and began to sprint toward it, he could hear the buzz of bullets behind him as countless guards dived out of rooms. He jumped through the closing security door to the transporter and into the electric rays. He felt the familiar sense of being pulled in a direction he didn't know existed as he was sent down to Gal Da Va island.
04-08-2004, 04:21 PM
this is well good! we want more kain! and maybe kain finds some of the messages left by flowen when hes on gal da val..?
07-08-2004, 08:50 PM
Shifty Wrote:...how about the force being a little sinister, maybe theres more to him than meets the eye. why was he in the ruins? why did he leave b4 u woke up?
A little sinister...heheheheh...I am DarkMagician! I am VERY sinister, I always have a motove...heheheh...*GRINS EVILLY*
How are these ideas?
As Shifty said, find a situation were I SEEM to be surrounded, and in grave danger, BUT, instead of aiding, you observe me fighting curiously, until I get overwhelmed. You leap up to rescue me, and then I use my Special Magic.
Special Magicin T.S.O.DM-Here is a quote-'DarkMagician's eyes glowed brilliant purple, and he started casting. "I warned you idiots! I...do not like...being embaressed...I will freeze time, and destrot you all!" He suddenly started to cast a spell and shouted, "Time stop!" Time was frozen...'
10-08-2004, 09:40 PM
Sorry for the dely, been away. Back for 2 days then i am off again so another part will be slow as well.
Kain rematerialised into the thick of a rainforest. The air was thick enough to grab and it tasted of sweat. Scanning around he looked for any sign of recent movement but could not find it. Perhaps this person didn't walk... From behind him he heard a rustle in the bushes and began to near it. He brushed them aside to find.. nothing but a big flower. Its petals in full, glorious bloom. As he turned away to continue his search he heard an unmistakeable hissing from the plant he had just left and something hit him on the back of his head before he could turn. The projectile felt something like a sticky brick thrown at 50mph. As he got up, his head still spinning from the blow, he came to realise that the beautiful plant he had seen was actually his attacker. Kain may not have been the quickest or brighest of hunters but he sure knew how to fight. With his target in his sights he whipped out a pistol and shot the plant in it's mouth as it began to spit again.
Walking on Kain came to an overlooking vista from which he could see the whole side of the island, from its flowing coast to its towering mountain peaks. Then, out of the corner of his eye Kain spotted a figure he would never forget. His long dark robes gathered around him, it was unmistakeably the mysterious force. Hopping down the hillside to the beach below, Kain landed with a dull thud onto the soft, glowing sand. He began to shout and run after the force when, as he veered around the corner he saw why he had no answer. The force was surrounded by countless ape-like creaures. Kain would have to hang back, not even he could fight that many monsters. Kain watched in curiosity as the Dark mage spoke the spidery language of magic and monster's fell in rings of fire, lightning and ice around him. In awe Kain almost ignored the few monsters that had noticed him and were beginning to close in on him. He snapped out of his trance and jump high into the air with a loud battle scream. As he dropped the world seem to slow and bend around him. He could hit each creature cleanly before he hit the ground with godly speed. He landed as light as a feather on the sand feeling stronger than ever. He looked toward the force to find him facing off against a gigantic armed monster with horns that reached into the sky and a chest that blocked at the sun. Feeling well equipped and able Kain sprinted in toward the beast and began to attack. Distracting the gigantic beast gave the force time to recooperate and prepare his next spell but as he did so the world seemed to melt away before his very eyes. Whether it was heat or exhaustion he didn't know but he did know he was out cold. Kain saw this in desperation as he was left to handle the beast alone. Raising his sword to his face, Kain charged at the beast's legs and slashed both in half at the knee. With a primal scream the huge creature, silhouetted against the sun, fell back into the see. With the waves lapping over its face, Kain turned his attention to the Force lying in the sun. The force began to come to said in a tired voice
"You should have left me, Nature should be able to act"
Kain was amazed at how stern and ungrateful someone could be even after he had saved his life.
"I just saved your life, so how about you say thanks and tell me your name"
The Force's dark eyes flashed with lightning and he sat up bolt upright.
"Your name is Kain Seibei, you don't have a home and prefer to camp on ragol if you can. Your mother died when you were 12 and left you with a father in the army. You went to stay with him and trained everyday with a pistol and sword. At eighteen you left him when you began to doubt what the government was doing was right. With your skills you began to take jobs at the hunter's guild and have been doing so ever since. Now, that cuts the small chat. By the way, My name is Dark Magician but you shall never need to call me by name",
Kain sat in amazement at the Dark magician and could not reply, Hell NONONE could reply to that...
Hope that's enough to keep you going until i return. Any ideas would be welcome.
Kain rematerialised into the thick of a rainforest. The air was thick enough to grab and it tasted of sweat. Scanning around he looked for any sign of recent movement but could not find it. Perhaps this person didn't walk... From behind him he heard a rustle in the bushes and began to near it. He brushed them aside to find.. nothing but a big flower. Its petals in full, glorious bloom. As he turned away to continue his search he heard an unmistakeable hissing from the plant he had just left and something hit him on the back of his head before he could turn. The projectile felt something like a sticky brick thrown at 50mph. As he got up, his head still spinning from the blow, he came to realise that the beautiful plant he had seen was actually his attacker. Kain may not have been the quickest or brighest of hunters but he sure knew how to fight. With his target in his sights he whipped out a pistol and shot the plant in it's mouth as it began to spit again.
Walking on Kain came to an overlooking vista from which he could see the whole side of the island, from its flowing coast to its towering mountain peaks. Then, out of the corner of his eye Kain spotted a figure he would never forget. His long dark robes gathered around him, it was unmistakeably the mysterious force. Hopping down the hillside to the beach below, Kain landed with a dull thud onto the soft, glowing sand. He began to shout and run after the force when, as he veered around the corner he saw why he had no answer. The force was surrounded by countless ape-like creaures. Kain would have to hang back, not even he could fight that many monsters. Kain watched in curiosity as the Dark mage spoke the spidery language of magic and monster's fell in rings of fire, lightning and ice around him. In awe Kain almost ignored the few monsters that had noticed him and were beginning to close in on him. He snapped out of his trance and jump high into the air with a loud battle scream. As he dropped the world seem to slow and bend around him. He could hit each creature cleanly before he hit the ground with godly speed. He landed as light as a feather on the sand feeling stronger than ever. He looked toward the force to find him facing off against a gigantic armed monster with horns that reached into the sky and a chest that blocked at the sun. Feeling well equipped and able Kain sprinted in toward the beast and began to attack. Distracting the gigantic beast gave the force time to recooperate and prepare his next spell but as he did so the world seemed to melt away before his very eyes. Whether it was heat or exhaustion he didn't know but he did know he was out cold. Kain saw this in desperation as he was left to handle the beast alone. Raising his sword to his face, Kain charged at the beast's legs and slashed both in half at the knee. With a primal scream the huge creature, silhouetted against the sun, fell back into the see. With the waves lapping over its face, Kain turned his attention to the Force lying in the sun. The force began to come to said in a tired voice
"You should have left me, Nature should be able to act"
Kain was amazed at how stern and ungrateful someone could be even after he had saved his life.
"I just saved your life, so how about you say thanks and tell me your name"
The Force's dark eyes flashed with lightning and he sat up bolt upright.
"Your name is Kain Seibei, you don't have a home and prefer to camp on ragol if you can. Your mother died when you were 12 and left you with a father in the army. You went to stay with him and trained everyday with a pistol and sword. At eighteen you left him when you began to doubt what the government was doing was right. With your skills you began to take jobs at the hunter's guild and have been doing so ever since. Now, that cuts the small chat. By the way, My name is Dark Magician but you shall never need to call me by name",
Kain sat in amazement at the Dark magician and could not reply, Hell NONONE could reply to that...
Hope that's enough to keep you going until i return. Any ideas would be welcome.