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My FanFic - Phantom_RAcast - 20-11-2003
Quote:Originally posted by Vahn RAmarit needs more action because its to boring :o
^^^ Er... Keri? Who the...
^Very true.
How is it? What could I do better. feed back please.
My FanFic - Vahn RAmar - 21-11-2003
THERE WE GO!
Heh, just wait, next chapter will be good, lots of action.
My FanFic - Thesord - 21-11-2003
Lol
Did you forget to get drunk before writing it(No offence.)
It's comic in some parts.
My FanFic - Vahn RAmar - 21-11-2003
-_- I'm 12. How would I get drunk?
My FanFic - Thesord - 22-11-2003
*Looks at the beer next to him*
Just a question why do you always get them killed?
My FanFic - Vahn RAmar - 22-11-2003
you're losing me.
My FanFic - Neo1989 - 23-11-2003
The story-line isn't bad it just needs a lot of filling out. Add some more adventure, action and possibly a bit more comedy. Oh, also try and lower the use of writing in the sentence 'Purplem RAmar' and put a note at the bottom of the page explaining who who is.
And anyway I couldn't write a story like that 3 years ago otherwise my English teacher wouldn't have been breathing down my neck constantly.
My FanFic - Ton - 24-11-2003
WTFreak. You did not introduce me. That was an ok story. Too short. Make longer introductions of characters. INCLUDE me.
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My FanFic - Issac - 24-11-2003
HEY TON! YOU FINNALLY JOINED!!! w00t w00t!!
My FanFic - Ton - 25-11-2003
Yup, I am finally in. I heard you mention my name in a few of these forums. What party?
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