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My FanFic
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#31
20-11-2003, 09:59 PM
Quote:Originally posted by Vahn RAmar
^^^ Er... Keri? Who the...

^Very true.

How is it? What could I do better. feed back please.
it needs more action because its to boring :o
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#32
21-11-2003, 12:46 AM
THERE WE GO!

Heh, just wait, next chapter will be good, lots of action.
UPDATED: Oct 25. 2019

Hi! I recently found my way back here and was feeling nostalgic. On the off chance that someone comes by here and remembers me, feel free to shoot me a line over on twitter.

I'm: [AT] legendaryvermin

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These days I teach programming and design games. I'm in Seattle. This was a really cool place to hang out growing up, even if most of y'all were in a totally different timezone.
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#33
21-11-2003, 01:04 AM
LolBig Grin
Did you forget to get drunk before writing it(No offence.)
It's comic in some parts.
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#34
21-11-2003, 01:44 AM
-_- I'm 12. How would I get drunk?
UPDATED: Oct 25. 2019

Hi! I recently found my way back here and was feeling nostalgic. On the off chance that someone comes by here and remembers me, feel free to shoot me a line over on twitter.

I'm: [AT] legendaryvermin

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These days I teach programming and design games. I'm in Seattle. This was a really cool place to hang out growing up, even if most of y'all were in a totally different timezone.
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#35
22-11-2003, 01:32 PM
*Looks at the beer next to him*
Just a question why do you always get them killed?Big Grin
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#36
22-11-2003, 09:59 PM
you're losing me.
UPDATED: Oct 25. 2019

Hi! I recently found my way back here and was feeling nostalgic. On the off chance that someone comes by here and remembers me, feel free to shoot me a line over on twitter.

I'm: [AT] legendaryvermin

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These days I teach programming and design games. I'm in Seattle. This was a really cool place to hang out growing up, even if most of y'all were in a totally different timezone.
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#37
23-11-2003, 10:23 AM
The story-line isn't bad it just needs a lot of filling out. Add some more adventure, action and possibly a bit more comedy. Oh, also try and lower the use of writing in the sentence 'Purplem RAmar' and put a note at the bottom of the page explaining who who is.

And anyway I couldn't write a story like that 3 years ago otherwise my English teacher wouldn't have been breathing down my neck constantly.
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#38
24-11-2003, 12:16 AM
WTFreak. You did not introduce me. That was an ok story. Too short. Make longer introductions of characters. INCLUDE me.

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#39
24-11-2003, 01:03 AM
HEY TON! YOU FINNALLY JOINED!!! w00t w00t!!
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25-11-2003, 06:09 AM
Yup, I am finally in. I heard you mention my name in a few of these forums. What party?


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