*Salivates*
The main character is finally taking shape and developing his own distinct personality which makes reading about him very engaging now. The only problem in this section was how choppy your typing got at the end. I sympathize that it is hard to keep your train of thought going on a scene and trying to revise it at the same time, but after you finish and post it you should do a little touch up work to make sure that it is smooth for the audience to read. That aside, I look forward to reading more in the future.
The main character is finally taking shape and developing his own distinct personality which makes reading about him very engaging now. The only problem in this section was how choppy your typing got at the end. I sympathize that it is hard to keep your train of thought going on a scene and trying to revise it at the same time, but after you finish and post it you should do a little touch up work to make sure that it is smooth for the audience to read. That aside, I look forward to reading more in the future.