Phantasy Star Engine

[Particle Ghost]

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I read this, and it's PSO, yey! Pretty good read. Good scene setting and accurate/believable descriptions of the creature and the hunters. Better than most of PSO fanfiction I've come across.

Get rid of "[censored]" in "a kind of [censored] spawn? Looks funny. XD
The extremist group sounds like Arkz to me. Is your Arks actually Arkz?

Welcome to Ragol Forums. I love PSO fanworks, so hope to see some more.

Y'see, this is why I hate posting my fan-fics on forums. It ignores indents between paragraphs and has censoring; all in all, it looks messy. What I wrote was actually 'a kind of dam'ed spawn of a lizard and a wolf' (except add the 'n', obviously). There's some grammatical errors that have been pointed out, too, and I apologise for that (truth be told, I was knackered when going over it). I'll sort them out when I post the second part.
And yes, you are partly correct on the Arkz. Let me explain: I'm not sticking to the sightly ridiculous plotline of PSO, PSO Ep. 3 and PSU; I'm making it... well, less fanciful. For example: the Photon Rifle that Bishop uses is my version of an Ice Rifle. I couldn't have the poor animal freeze into a big block of comical looking ice, could I? Instead, I had the rifle flash freeze the tissue and bone, which is much more interesting and 'believable' to write. Similar can be said about my 'Arks'; they are instead a much more violent group made up of ex- and current Hunters, as well as disgruntled civilians and soldiers, and they use every dirty method in the book in order to overthrow the current Pioneer 2 government. And they don't use bloody cards! That's my Arks. Oh, and the 's' is my fault; I hated PSO Ep. 3 so much that I hardly remember anything about it, mainly 'cause I don't want to. Plus using the 'z' spelling looks cheesy, so I'm sticking with Arks, thanks.

Cheers for the feedback, guys; the following parts are much more eventful, I promise.