21-08-2004, 04:52 AM
wow, the level of your syntax is really amazing. In points of large action, you use your sentence structure perfectly, and your diction...very rich selection of words. You should've been in my A.P English Literature course this year, our teacher would've loved your writing. I see it will little flaws in all honesty (other than a mistake, you meant to put and but you put an, no big deal at all) so I can't really offer any criticizism, it is a gripping story and if all novels were written this way, I'd be turned into a reader for sure.
PSO is a game of my past but those I came in contact with are still a part of me.
Strength comes not from the size of your muscles, but the depth of your heart, and the cause you're defending with it.
Strength comes not from the size of your muscles, but the depth of your heart, and the cause you're defending with it.