My first Fanfic

[Deadly Zero]

heres the forth chapter. its not that great but i was thinking of making a chapter like this so bear with me.

Chapter four: Death and rebirth

Ahhh damn.. where am I? *DM asks himself as a FOmar walks into the room*
You are in my cabin and i found you knocked out by the waterfall but i saved you couse you have not fulfilled your destiny to slay the destined one.
You have met him.. he is that red haired guy named... Iori Yagami.You are destined to kill him and become the most powerful force that ever lived and if things go ok for you, you could become immorrtal and live forever.
*DM then interupted the fomar while he was speaking*
Hmm if what you are saying is true then what happens if i end up being the one that gets killed?
Oh DM you worry to much i will help you kill him and make you the ultimate force.
*Then a group of angry gibbles attack the force and DM*
Oh shit *Yells Dm as he casts a powerful megid breath on the gibbles*
die now!! *yells DM as the fomar also cast a megid breath* How did you do that?! *Asks DM*
I was too one of the most powerful forces that existed DM. I am your grandfather.
No you cant be my grandfather he died on pioneer 1.
Do i did not die they made up that as a cover story for my disappearance. *Says DM's grandfather*
Now go DM the man you seek is in a bar about 5 miles from here. go now and kill him!!
*Dm then teleports to the bar and walks in*
*Iori sees Dm and hides in the shadows*
Whats he doing here i thought we had finished him at the waterfall.
it doesnt matter i must tell the others that he is here.*Iori then sees Ria walk by and pulls her into the room he is in*
hey ria DM is still alive and he is here.
*Ria then looks at him and says*
ok lets get the others. *Iori then goes and gets kain,tiffany and ria gets in contact with grave*
Grave this is Ria we need you again. *Grave replies*
What for?? Well its about DM, Grave DM is still alive and his is here.
Impossible!!*yells grave*
ok ill be right there.
*With a flash Grave appears in the bar and goes straight for DM*
DM!!! YOU WILL DIE NOW!! *Yells Grave as he pulls out his scthye*
No grave not here!! *Yells Iori*
There are to many people here that could be hurt.
*Grave then launches his scthye at DM and cuts him across the chest. Iori then grabs keliann and helps the other people escape.*
Go Keliann help out any people that are injured and... Aghh!!
*Yells Iori as grave's scthye stabs him in the back*
Damn. *Iori begins to cough as he turns to see grave and DM*
You..you...did...thi...s...to......m....e..
*Mumbles Iori as he pulls out the scthye and his fist becomes covered in purple flames*
Take this!! *yells iori as he throws fire at DM*
Fool this fire wont hurt....me..What the!!?? why is it burning me?!?!
*Iori then answers DM's question*
This is not regular fire, this is fire powered by my orochi blood and it burns your very soul!!
OIh hell *yells DM as he falls to the ground and cast a megid at Iori. Iori sees the oncoming megid and jumps out of the way*
That wont work on me again!! *Yells Iori as he dashes toward DM and performs his Demonic Rush*
*Then out of no where DM's grandfather appears and renders Iori powerless*
Now DM kill him!!
*Dm then runs toward Iori and starts to hit him with spells over and over again*
Now its time to show you true power Iori!!
*Dm then hits iori with pure magic and kills him*
*Everyone stands there looking at where Iori had been killed to see that his body became covered in flames and burnt to a crisp.*
*Iori then wakes up in a room that is completely white and starts to stumble around*
Where am I?