20-02-2005, 10:09 PM
Ria Wrote:I didn't want to say anything, but now I speak. I agree with Mirinee. My say is, I don't see much descriptive writtign here abotu what's going on. It seems in some parts you rush so far ahead I'm left thinking "how did that happen?" I reckon you are leaving points out here.
Don't get angry or anything, you're story is quite acceptable but you need more work. If you don't belive me, I know a review site (unfortunatly for TM and anime fics only) and if they got ahold of your fic they review it and be much harsher. Trust me, taking bad review spurs yuo on to become a better writter. Honestly IS the best policey you know.
I could prove to you how much I've improved within hmm.. 3 years. But my first attempts were so poor I'd die if anyone read them T_T;
Advice: Read some stories or books.
Agh...I have gone soft from having good friends here (They know who they are, K M, +A) Usually, I would beat you both to death for this. But, I knew from the start the detail was too little.
As I said, I did them for fun, and at the end of the day, I really could not give a buggery as to what anyone else thinks.
Kashima, thank you for supporting me anyway.
Mirinee, thank you for betraying me...oops, I meant, thanks for the consrtuctive criticism.
By the way, I have read in total 356 BOOKS BY VARIOUS AUTHORS. SO PLEASE DO NOT TELL ME TO READ BOOKS.