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My first Fanfic
#21
A new time eh? Beutiful never thaught of it myself. Keep it up DZ, u aren't a bad writer as u said.
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#22
Remember Iori- I serve NOONE! I am my own man! I would merely turn on you all once the demons were slain...Or just teleport to a place of safety and finish off the winners.

I'll NOT help you if I can...
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#23
DarkMagician Wrote:Remember Iori- I serve NOONE! I am my own man! I would merely turn on you all once the demons were slain...Or just teleport to a place of safety and finish off the winners.

I'll NOT help you if I can...
i know but you havent read chapter three yet. I think you might like what it has in store for your character..
Iori Yagami:"Only one of the bloodline can control such power, such power can only be mine!!"
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#24
Hmm...Well, HAYAKU! UPLOAD THE NEXT PART! I MUST REST NOW IN EXACTLY 56 SECONDS!
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#25
sadly i havent typed it up yet as i am still brainstorming the ideas for that chapter Tongue
Iori Yagami:"Only one of the bloodline can control such power, such power can only be mine!!"
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#26
ok here it is chapter three

Chapter three: The Betrayal
*Iori and the others run out to meet the enemies head on and they noticed something odd*
*Ria looks ahead and sees DM chanting a spell that she has never heard and fires a shot at a demon in front of her and yells* Iori DM is up to something you must stop him or else!!!
*Right then DM casts a very powerful Shifta and Deband on the demons and Zalure jellen on Iori, ria, keliann, kain and tiffany .*
Damn its too late!! I feel weaker *says Iori as he falls to the ground. DM then moves in to kill Iori and right when he gets there a figure in a cloak covers Iori and teleports him to a safe area*
HUH HOW DID YOU SURVIVE GRAVE?!? *Yells DM in an angry/confused voice*
I thought i killed you back then.
*Then grave replied* You did kill me but i joined the undead army and i am here to get revenge against you!!!!!!!!!
*Grave pulls out his scythe and launches it at DM and it cuts his right leg*
Damn my leg!! RESTA!!!
*Then DM's wound is sealed up and DM dashes at Grave strikeing hiw with his summit moon*
You will cease to exist Grave, It doesnt matter how many times i have to kill you. YOU WILL PERISH FROM EXISTENCE!!
*Dm then grabs five glowing orbs and stabs the orbs into his chest*
This is it for you grave!!!
*Then DM's chest begins to glow and DM's body begins to glow with light*
*Then DM stands up and starts to walk toward grave . Grave then launches his scythe at DM and when it hits it breaks*
Damn how did that happen?!? It is supposed to be indestructible.
*Just then out of no where Iori comes flying out and lands three punches in DM's ribcage making him stagger back a few feet*
*Iori then gets up and activates his Dmonic Rush. Dm is hit over and over all over his body.*
Damn you Iori you will die for that!!
*Ultimate DM then launches a powerful Megid at Iori and when it hits Iori falls to the ground*
That should do it. *Says Ultimate DM as he looks at Iori's lifeless body on the ground. Just then Iori's body picks it slef up and Iori's hair is no longer red its black*
Heheh you have released me Dm for that I am greatful but now you must die. *Says Zero as he gets his energy whip out*
But how did you get released and who are you?! *Asks ultimate DM in a confused voice*
I am Zero. I am Iori's evil side and I can only be released when Iori falls into a coma or is in grave danger. I hate him as much as he hates me but for me to live he has to live so you see how that works.
*Then Dm disappears and Zero's whip latches onto DM's ankle pulling him down to the ground*
I can see everywhere you go DM and you cant do anything about it either *Says Zero while laughing. Just then DM casts a spell unlike anyother called demonic spear which encloses zero in a circle and thousands of spears come up out of the ground*
DIE YOU BASTARD!! *Yells DM. Then Grave sneaks up behind DM and whacks him in the back of the head causing him to black out*
Now Keliann and kain cast reverser on Iori then resta! *Yells grave as he throws DM into a river that leads to a waterfall*
That should take care of him *says grave as he gets ready to teleport back to the hunters guild to collect his money*
Wait, who are you?? Kelann asks grave*
I am the Undead Assasin Grave. We may have fought together now but i may get a mission in which i must kill one of you. *Says Grave as he enters the portal. Meanwhile at the bottom of the waterfall DM's battered body is picked up by a FOmar and taken to his house*
Oh dear boy you are much to young to die as you havent completed your destiny DM. *Says the FOmar with an evil smirk on his face*
Iori Yagami:"Only one of the bloodline can control such power, such power can only be mine!!"
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#27
Keep it up DZ, looking forward to next one.
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#28
ok so you all think its good?? well ill make it last like 10 or 12 chapters and then write a second part to it but i must not plan ahead because if i do i will most likely for get evrything i planned :S
Iori Yagami:"Only one of the bloodline can control such power, such power can only be mine!!"
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#29
DZ... Take your time man! no need to harsh. But keep going with the fanfic.
I..NE..ED...FAN..FI..C *dies* Tongue
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#30
Ah, this is more like it! Remember: I AM DARKMAGICIAN! KYAA-HA-HA-HA-HAHHH!!! DEATH TO ALL THOSE THAT OPPOSE ME!

*Ahem* Keep up this standard, perhaps I may let you live. (Knock me out will you!?)
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