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I once hesitated about things, words caught in my throat.
I've waited too long, and now it burns me to hear you speak of him.
This is the price i pay for waiting, the burn reducing my heart to ashes before your very eyes.
With nothing left of myself i carry on to the next day, next week, of my life.

I'm talking to you but you're too distracted by him to answer.
Light the match.
We're speaking and you bring him up.
Light the blaze.
Everyone knows how I feel but you.
Light my pyre, I've died.

The moment i saw you i had to have you.
Within a forest of people you are the one i need.
Next time maybe I'll be quicker, fast enough to catch you're attention before another one of him.
I'll keep watch until that day, till the dawn of us.
And when our sun rises, I'll pray that it will never set.
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HalloweenJak; Level 60 Undead Rogue (Stonemaul)
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#2
There great lyric. They sound like they have been written by some famous band.
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#3
I'm waiting for him to say that he wrote them...
Yeah they're briliant.
Anyone caught smoking at Layer Road will be buried in the
centre circle by the forking groundsman, with only their head
showing, and left there during the second half.
Previous threats of electrocution, being made to listen to Will
Young and being hung from the floodlights have
failed to discourage all the smokers.

If Cardiff players had to stand and pay respects to an English national anthem, would they? I don't think so.
But Arsenal players manage to do it.
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#4
I actually did write them. Wink
I just didn't say so before i got some honest feedback on them. Thanks guys.
I tend to write songs from time to time when i need to release.
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HalloweenJak; Level 60 Undead Rogue (Stonemaul)
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#5
They are good!!!

Kind of emo-ey...but hey, thats like what I write, so I dont care!!!

I like that 'Light my pyre' line, its excellent!
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Shadamoo Wrote:They are good!!!

Kind of emo-ey...but hey, thats like what I write, so I dont care!!!

I like that 'Light my pyre' line, its excellent!

Thanks Big Grin
i'm in a kind of emo-state nowadays. so that reflects in my writing
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#7
wow excellent the best lyrics i can think off is goodness gracious i have great bulls of fire im feelin goog and sumin sumin blah. Ill post sum good lyrics sumtime
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#8
err right. Well from now on please give me serious comments about the lyrics i write ok?

So for the next song:

Friends for bullets, girls for guns, I've been shot in the heart.
Can't live much longer, but I think I'll hold on.
Just remember, it's not the gun or the bullet that's killing me.
The two being together caused this wound.

Like slow-motion i watched it coming towards me,
slowly spinning through the air, could have dodged it.
Nevermind what could have been, i let it hit me straight.
No one to talk to, no doctors to remove the bullet.
So it sits inside me everyday, infecting and burning at me.
You sit there smiling, don't even know you've gotten away with murder.
If you're ever alone just say my name and I'll rise again and come to your side.
Because the one that killed me is the one I long to be with.

Clinging on, to the life I love to live.
Everyday I'm not with you I die once more.
But if I wasn't such a fool I would have dodged the bullet.
Sent by you, not meant to harm me.
Accidents happen! it's ok. It's not like you knew this would happen.

I was too quiet, didn't open up to you, so now I've got this open wound.
Sew me up, fast, with the thread of your love.
This will leave a scar but it will remind me,
to be fast enough to become your bullet to someone else.
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HalloweenJak; Level 60 Undead Rogue (Stonemaul)
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#9
Ah, sorry... It's not like me to be negative, but they're a bit cliche. Smile ('Scuse the absence of an accent.)
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#10
sorry, but the last thing the world needs is more emo.
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