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The Saga Of DarkMagician: My fanfic
#31
yay hold on do i get killed? DO I?!?!?!
Iori Yagami:"Only one of the bloodline can control such power, such power can only be mine!!"
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#32
I have not got far yet in the SIXTH STORY. I do not know yet...

Meantime, here is a spoiler from SIXTH STORY:

Meanwhile, RobDeLaMorte was in the bar, sipping his whisky, thinking how best to tackle Falz, when all of a sudden the room went silent. RobDeLaMorte could sense someone important or famous had come in, but paid no heed. The stranger walked over slowly to him, "Why do you not look, like the rest of these people?" he asked, in a calm voice. RobDeLaMorte carried on staring ahead, drinking. "Because I have much more important work to do, than look at some silly person, like an awestruck sheep..." The stranger thought for a moment. "Well?" RobDeLaMorte asked, "Well what?" the stranger replied. "Bugger off, so I may have a quiet uninterrupted drink!" Gasps emenated from across the bar. The stranger frowned inside his mask, and slowly, stealthily, pulled out a scythe. He swung at RobDeLaMorte's back, but RobDeLaMorte saw his reflection in the bar, span round, and caught the blade between his hands. "That is not very friendly..." He said slowly, as he glared at his opponent. He stood there, tall yet a little stocky in his build. He was a ranger, and he wore a black cloak and a seemingly empty mask. "Who are you?" RobDeLaMorte asked slowly. "Who wants to know?" The cold voice spoke back to him. "RobDeLaMorte, The Undead One!" The mask suddenly glowed red at the eye-pieces. "You...you are the one I have been searching for. I have been hired to slay you!" The stranger said, as he drew his scythe back again. "Aren't you going to tell me your name then? It's common courtesy." RobDeLaMorte replied slowly, while sipping some more beer. The stranger flinched, "...Very well. Though it will not do you any good in a minute...I am the famed assassin Grave!" RobDeLaMorte finished his whisky. "Well Grave, shall we step outside?" They both did so...
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#33
Ha ha excelent starting for the second story. I hope that we may become allies in it eventually. But it is your story, so u may do as u please. Keep it up. [Image: minimes.jpg] "minions start to clap from behind G_G." I thought I told u idiont to go to hell......... wait the already did :S :S . But they make a good point nuntheless.
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#34
cool spoiler, the entire things gonna be great!
Apologies to my fellow ragol.co.uk Teammates, i'm sorry for leaving you leaderless, and even more so for not getting back. but i wish you the best of luck in my absence! i miss you all!
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
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#35
You know it will! I am nearly finished with the second story ending... just give me one more day....
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#36
take the time you need, but hurry please im on the edge of my seat cuz i like all your and mini berts works i went to fanfiction and read both the powers of
and both were great
I ca draw good but you make the best stories
Iori Yagami:"Only one of the bloodline can control such power, such power can only be mine!!"
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#37
Crawler...KYAA-HA-HA-HAH!!!

It shall be so... But I must decide when to put you into my Sixth Story...

My sixth is about 21% Complete....
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#38
Episode 11: Into The Light

After teleporting to where the next sage was, DarkMagician was wandering around because Duraku had disappeared, "Duraku! Dammit! Where are you?!" DarkMagician shouted into the empty rooms that he was standing between. DarkMagician wandered in another empty room, "Duraku!" He yelled, no answer. "Well, if he doesn't show, I will fight the sage myself!" He said angrily, as he continued across the room, and down a hall. When he emerged from the door of the next room, he stood with his mouth open in shock...

DarkMagician stood in the doorway with his mouth open, the room in front of him was covered with sparkaling crystals, and what was that they were giving off? Light? Could that be where the light is comeing from? DarkMagician's thoughts were cut off by a HUcaseal stepping in the doorway, casting a shadow over him, DarkMagician looked straight at her, she had dark blue metal plating, her face was nothing but metal coming to a point with on small visor which he assumed were her eyes, she was roughly as tall as he was. "Are you Geon Iris?" DarkMagician asked, "I am. But that doesn't matter. Draw your weapon." Geon Iris said as she put up her fists, DarkMagician quickly reached back for his summit moon, but before he got it Geon Iris charged forward with lightning speed, hitting him in the stomach with innumerous punches. She uppercutted him, and he sailed into the wall, landing heavily on the floor unconscious.....

Some time later, he woke up again. "D...damn...what...hit me?" He looked around. The sage was dead, and no-one else was there. He stood up, and saw marks on the walls and floor, "Noo! Dammit! I was defeated, AND they killed the without me!? How?! How is it possible!? I have great powers, how can mere humans kill the sage that defeated me!?" DarkMagician shook his head, and looked around. "They all left me behind, they shall suffer for this ignobility..." With that, he teleported to where he knew the last sages would be; The Ruins.

Episode 12: Into The Darkness-Reborn

DarkMagician reappeared just at a T-junction to the others, and stealthily joined the back of the party. Mini Bert was so focused, he did not even notice. Logan had turned around, but was hardly surprised by now, and merely nodded silently. "The orbs..." DarkMagician began. "Here." Logan handed them over to him. DarkMagician absorbed them instantly, not even attempting to conceal it. "What are you...doing?" Logan blurted. "I destroyed their souls..." DarkMagician said simply. Logan nodded again, and they hurried on.

Mini Bert entered a room alone, and the door sealed shut instantly. DarkMagician stood there thinking, as the others panicked. "She's going to kill him!" Cloud yelled after a while. DarkMagician smiled to himself, thinking, "It matters not whom kills whom...I shall finish off whoever is left, and claim that albert fell in battle with the Sages. I shall absorb their power, and be the ultimate mage EVER!" Logan turned around again, and screamed at him, "Why are you smiling!? My brother's clone is being killed too and you smile!?" DarkMagician glanced at him darkly, and ignored him. "What's wrong with you!?" DarkMagician huffed, and replied, "Bugger off Logan. I truly do not care who dies and who lives...leave me be..." Logan's face went red with rage, as he punched DarkMagician in the face. The others all turned around. DarkMagician got up, spitting blood, snarling, "Stupid little fool! How DARE you strike ME! Your brother shall die, along with you and your weak friends! HEHAHAHAHAHH!!!" With that, he teleported away again, and reappeared inside a room full of ancient carvings. "Interesting...Runnu and the Sages...Wait! I hear those fools coming!" And DarkMagician hid in the shadows, as Mini Bert confronted Justiceon.....

Episode 13: The End of Mini Bert?

Justiceon sent forth many of the silver chains that had slain the dark sage Adameon before, and many of Mini Bert's friends fell swiftly. DarkMagician smiled to himself, "Those chains steal their souls from what I got on these carvings..." he mused. Eventually, only Mini Bert and Justiceon remained. "Now ye, i forgot about ye. I shall destroy ye the old way." Justiceon mocked as he rose his hand. "You won't do anything!" Mini Bert yelled as he lunged at Justiceon, three chains moved to block the assault, and were cut clear off, and a piece of Justiceons back. "Ye shall perish with thine friends." Justiceon said as he clecnhed his fists, the chains wrapped around his fists and came to one large point. Justiceon lunged at Mini Bert, Mini Bert jumped back to dodge and followed through with a forward assault, Justiceon did the same. "YE be a good swordsman." Justiceon said playfully, "And you are a fair opponent." Mini Bert added. They matched each other move for move in every swing, parry, block and lunge. DarkMagician watched silently, awaiting the victor of this battle with greedy eyes. Just then, Mini Bert tried a trick. As Justiceon lunged forward, Mini Bert jumped back to dodge. Thinking that Mini Bert was going to lunge at him, Justiceon jumped backward, Mini Bert leaped to the side, and ran across quickly catching Justiceon in the side and knocking him to the floor. DarkMagician groaned, as Mini Bert drew his Vengeance Blade, ready to stab Justiceon. Suddenly, Justiceon spoke up, "Come now, that's no way to.." Justiceon said as he removed his hood, "Treat your creator."

Mini Bert was visibly shocked, as was DarkMagician, "NOOO!" He thought, "Not HIM! How can he yet live?! Dammit all!" It was Albert, the hunter who had supposedly perished so long ago. Just then, Giga Bert staggered up to his feet, recognised the enemy and screamed at Mini Bert, "Don't be a fool Mini bert! If you don't kill him Rannu will return and he will be gone again!" But Mini Bert would not harm his creator. Suddenly, a chain rose up and stabbed Mini Bert in the arm, sending him sprawling. "Your spirit now belongs to..." Justiceon began, but Mini Bert got up again. "I have no soul" He said plainly, as Justiceon in a fit of rage hurled three chains towards him. Mini Bert jumped backwards and brought the Vengeance Blade up and readied for the attack, as the first chain came he ducked and cut the head off. Mini Bert jumped up slashing downwards as the second chain came at him, cutting of the head. The third came straight at him, Mini Bert brought the blade up as a sheild, which deflected the attack, followed by a swift cut of the Venegance blade. "Not bad." Justiceon said as the remaining chains wrapped around his wrists, making a blade once more. "I willn't fight you." Mini Bert said as he looked at the chain heads, they each let out two blue lights, the spirits of his friends. The spirits flew over and implanted themselves in the bodies of Logan, Dale, Vahn, Cloud, Ton and Beat. Justiceon ran forward thrusting the chain blades wildly, Mini Bert skillfully jumped left and right blocking each attack. Justiceon jumped back and lunged forward, Mini Bert knocked him away with a single swing, but behind him was one of his chains, which skewered Mini Bert in the side. "AAAAAH!" Mini Bert yelled in pain and fell to the floor. "Your mine now." Justiceon began to walk to Mini bert, when he was hit by a barrage of bullets from Giga's justy. "Gnat." Justiceon said plainly as a chain rose from the ground, flying at Giga, pierceing his armour sending him flying. "Now back to the main problem..." Justiceon turned around, in time to see the Vengeance Blade swinging at the chains. Mini bert lunged forward, cutting off the heads of chains. There now remained only four chains. "Perhaps Mini Bert will defeat Justiceon after all!" DarkMagician said to himself, horrified. Blue lights flew off of the severed chain heads, returning to their physical bodies. "You little annoyance!" Justiceon said as he launched yet another chain at Mini Bert, piercing his left leg, making him once more fall to the floor. Justiceon's remaining chains formed into a blade around his left hand, and he charged forward, a sinister smile on his face. Mini Bert looked up limply as his death approached. Logan held his head groggily and looked up at Mini Bert, laying there, and Justiceon running towards him. He tried to move, but he fell back down again, all he could do was watch. Justiceon was now laughing as he ran towards Mini Bert, pulled the blade back and got ready to thrust it through him.....
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#39
Final Episode: O, Bitter Vistory!

As Mini Bert prepared for the devistating blow, he closed his eyes...but it never came, Mini Bert opened his eyes, to see Justiceon's hair changed colour, instead of the eerie silver, it had become a shining blonde. Justiceon's eyes had become less menacing, more, innocent. Mini Bert knew immediatly, Albert had gained control. DarkMagician only just stopped himself screaming out. "NO! HE IS BACK! Now what am I to do!?"Albert smiled at Mini bert, and cast resta on him. "Goodbye." Albert said as a chain rose up, aimed at Mini Bert, but it slowly turned, and aimed at Albert's forehead. Just then, a light entered DarkMagician's eyes. Sanity seeped into his brain once more. "D-don't..." Mini Bert said weakly, Albert smiled, then the chain thrust through his forehead, he began falling to the floor slowly, "Don't worry." he said softly as his body disintegrated. "AALBERRRT!!!" DarkMagician screamed, as his body vanished.

The others turned to face him. He paid no attention to them. "I was a fool... I wanted power... And it consumed me... I killed...Ultima, ROB and Sakura... Oh what have I done!?" Logan had to be held back by the others, as he lunged for him. DarkMagician stood up shakily, and walked over to where Justiceon and Albert's souls still lingered. "There is only one thing left to do..." DarkMagician absorbed their souls, and raised his hands up to the heavens. He screamed up as pure magic surged around him, "Revive my friends. I command it!" The magic was suddenly discharged from his body as everyone looked on speechless. He dropped to the floor from the effort, and whispered one last "Forgive me...Al...bert" as he lost consciousness.....
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#40
My third story; argueably the longest and silliest.

Legal stuff: All characters are MY property with some exceptions! Yes! An original story! Infinete, JAMIE, PETE, and Sleppy are not my characters, okay?
Extra stuff: The Episode title is first, then the recommended music tune to listen to while reading that episode, okay? heheh!

Prologue: AUW 2033 -Day dawns-PSO-

After the business with the sages, DarkMagician returned to the forest, and through his magical power, ressurrected all of his Rappy friends, Sakura, UltimaGamer and ROB:type-08. They had all decided to live in the Forest with DarkMagician, and so it was nice and peaceful. "Finally...peace at last..." DarkMagician mumbled, as he dived off a rock, into the river. As he climbed up for another turn, he spotted a glint of photon reflecting the sun, in his Forest. He looked around. "Odd...ROB, Ultima and Sakura are here...who could that be? I'd better check..." After putting his clothing on again, DarkMagician walked casually through the Forest to that point...
As he walked, he noticed smoke up ahead. It was a campire, still barely burning. "Hmm...looks like someone has been, or is here...I will wait a while..." Sure enough, after two hours, a group of four hunters reappeared. DarkMagician watched them, and sized them up. "Hmmm...three HUmar ...and a HUcast easy enough." He decided to listen in. He caught most of the conversation. "So...where will we find this FOmar?" "Well...if we kill rappy...that'd get him here..." "Oh yeah! Real smooth Sleppy, you idiot! He'd kick our asses if we did! I heard he's VERY powerful!" "Well what do we do then PETE?" "Erm...haven't quite worked that out yet..." "You're as useless as Sleppy is..." "Shut up Infinete!" "Anyway! I say we capture the FOnewearl. Probably the safer option too." "Good idea JAMIE." "Yeah let's do that. hey, what's her name? anyone?" "Um..." "er..." DarkMagician called out, "Her name is Sakura, and if you touch her, you will regret it!" "Who's there?!" one shouted. "Come out!"
DarkMagician stepped out...

Episode 1: An Oppertunity In A Thousand! -You have nowhere to go-PSO-

"Who are you?" the HUcast asked. "I will not give my name to anyone who willn't tell me theirs first!" DarkMagician replied quickly. "Huh! Should we tell him?" The HUcast asked his teammates "Yeah!" A short, blue-haired HUmar said. "I am PETE, The robot is Sleppy, That HUmar with blond hair is Infinete, aaand the other one is JAMIE." "Now..." The HUcast began, "Who are you?" "Me? I am the protector of this forest. I am DarkMagician!" *wooosh* A tumbleweed went by, as the hunters realised they had indeed found him. Infinete thought, "Purple dress...purple hair...Force...it's him alright!" He shouted suddenly, "You guys! Battle stations! Remember your tactics." As they formed a square ring around DarkMagician, he could not help but laugh. "Do you idiots think you can defeat me!??!? I, who have slain the sages!? I shall crush you!" He said, as he readied his Sorcerors Cane...
DarkMagician looked around. Sleppy held a Soul Eater, Infinete held G.Assassins Sabers, JAMIE held Flowens Sword, and PETE held a Yamato. "Heheh, easy!" DarkMagician thought. Suddenly, they all ran up to him and tried to hit him. DarkMagician jumped high, but JAMIE also jumped, and hit DarkMagician's arm. "Dammit! Always that arm that gets hurt!" DarkMagician shouted, as he landed. As they rushed him, DarkMagician teleported above them all, and cast Gibarta at them. JAMIE and Infinete dodged it, but PETE and Sleppy were hit. DarkMagician had already turned to face JAMIE and Infinete, when he felt a great pain shoot up his arm. He looked down. Yamoto was sticking through his arm. "W-what!?!" He shouted in pain, as he turned. "Ha! Ice will not affect me!" PETE shouted triumphantly. "Agh...my arm...I cannot cast so many spells without my arm...I'm in trouble...unless..." DarkMagician thought and then he shouted out loud "Ultima! Warpo!" A couple of seconds later, UltimaGamer was at his side. "What the? I was practicing spells, and WOOOSH! I get teleported here? What is it DarkMagician? Oh! Y-your arm is...those BASTARDS!" He drew his Club of Laconium and The attack started anew. Infinete and Pete went for DarkMagician, who could not cast any spells, so he kicked PETE in the head, as he was pummeled in the back by Infinete's Sabers. Ultima Took on JAMIE, who had tried to carve him up but missed entirely, "Grants!" UltimaGamer shouted, as JAMIE dropped to the floor, "Da..mm..it..." Ultima turned to help DarkMagician as Sakura appeared. "What is going on here!?...!!! DarkMagician, you are hurt!" She ran over to him. He struggled to speak as he fought on. "Sakura...forget the wound...help me defeat these two enemies. I cannot manage spells alone...help me, combine one large one..." She immediatly ran over to DarkMagician, as did UltimaGamer. They all held their hands out. "What the hell ARE they doing!?!" PETE shouted. "I don't know..." Infinete replied "Let's just get them!" *BLAM!* The biggest ball of energy ever seen around flew out of the trio's hands and caught Infinete smack in the face. PETE tried to dodge, and was caught by it on his leg. "YEAAAGH!!!" PETE screamed, as his leg burned icy cold. He looked around. Three Forces against him with a bad leg, no choice really. "RETREEAT!" PETE shouted, as Sleppy defrosted and JAMIE got up. "What about the Force?" Sleppy shouted. "Forget him. We will finish him later!" Sleppy and JAMIE picked up Infinete's limp body and ran. The three Forces stood there, shocked at the size of the energy attack. "Well...bugger me!" DarkMagician said, astonished. "I thought I couldn't do it, but I did! Injured arm and all!" "Speaking of injured arm DarkMagician..." He turned around. It was Ultima "We'd best get you some healing...Even Resta cannot help THAT...I know! There is a strange hermit from pioneer 2 up at the Caves. He can create a potion that will instantly close and repair your wounds. I know, because he was Pioneer's best healer. What do you think?" "Well...sounds good to me!" DarkMagician said, as he winced. Ultima smiled "Well...who shall go then? He will only see two people at a time..." DarkMagician thought for a minute, and spoke. "Well...I can definately depend on you and ROB to defend the Forest while I am gone, but...I MUST bring Sakura, as those four mentioned kidnapping her..." He fell silent. "Why did they want me anyway?" He thought, "Well...It does not matter for now." "Anyway...is that alright?" He asked them. "yes." "Fine with me!" "Good... Let us go now then! The sooner I can cast as well as before...the better!"

Episode 2: Anger -Revolution to the origin part 2-PSO-

DarkMagician walked through the caves, relying on Sakura's magic to destroy the monsters mostly. "*sighs* I am not used to depending on other people so much..." DarkMagician started. "Well...it's okay! Everyone needs help at some point!" Sakura told him. "....." "What about those sages, they were alone, and a team effort beat them. The same with Rannu." DarkMagician laughed "Hahah! You are right, as usual Sakura!" "I know." She replied, smiling. As she was looking at DarkMagician, a Guil Shark slowly walked up behind her and was about to strike when, "Look out! Uhnn..." DarkMagician dived at her, and moved her out of the way. She was lucky. DarkMagician's other arm was not. "AAAGH!!! DAMMIT ALL!!! NOW WHAT CAN I DO?!? I AM HELPLESS WITHOUT USE OF EITHER ARM!!!" DarkMagician screamed out, as he saw his arm hacked half off. He kicked the buggery out of the Guil shark and slumped down to the floor groaning. Sakura ran over, and bandaged the wounds as best she could, "DarkMagician! Oh, this is my fault! I'm sorry! But...is that really as painful as you make it out to be?" DarkMagician gave her such a mean stare, she turned away deeply embarressed. "This, my dear Sakura, is at about the same pain level as getting disemboweld with a rusty spoon, while having cheese graters rubbed up and down certain parts of the anatomy!" Sakura blushed crimson in shock and shame. "DARKMAGICIAN! ...I..am sorry..." She cried out as she ran ahead on her own. DarkMagician looked up. "What!?! Dammit! Wait...I...need...you....." "Bah! I need a rest..." DarkMagician sat on the floor. "Let me rethink the situation...no friends here, my arms are busted, no spells, cannot use weapons, lots of enemies, no communications, Oh joy! What a MARVELOUS DAY THIS IS!!!" He shouted out, oozing sarcasm.

Somehow, DarkMagician managed to get through three rooms on his own. After kicking the last Nano Dragon unconcious, an idea came to him. "Hey...what if I use the Nano Dragon as a steed? Then I can attack enemies, as well as him. Hahah!" DarkMagician jumped on it's back and it woke with a start. After much bucking, kicking, yelling and gripping, DarkMagician finally tamed the Dragon. "Perfect! Now I at least stand a chance! Now...for the Hermit..." DarkMagician rode through the next six rooms with ease, when he entered a pitch black room. He looked around. No switch. "What the!? Well, maybe the Dragon can see in th..WOAH!" DarkMagician shouted, as the Dragon lasered a group of hidden Pal sharks. "Nice work!" DarkMagician said, as he patted the Dragon with his limp hand. It grew bigger and stronger. "Oh yes, I forgot. When they kill, they get bigger! heh! Onwards then!" DarkMagician spurred it on, when it stopped. It would not move. Something was on the floor. "Oh very well...I'll move it aside." DarkMagician told it. He felt the floor. It was a body..."Ah crap! I hope it is not who I think it is..." The light suddenly came on. He held Sakura, unconcious on his lap. "Bugger...I knew it!" He tried to slap her with his limp arm to wake her up. Nothing. He contemplated a Foie, but remembered he cannot cast. He thought that kissing her probably would wake her, though it would be unforgivable and earn him a swift death, especially after earlier. "Aha! I know..."
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