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Finally, My PSO Fan-fic
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12-03-2005, 05:46 PM
Ana amazing start so far. I absolutely love the monologue at the beginning, it was nice to have your story start like that. There were two times when I thought it got a bit awkward, but they still work in the fic, if that makes sense. I'm not quite sure why the force girl went from crying to laughing so quickly (that's probably something I missed ^^; ), so I'd like to see a little more about that.

You have a strong sense of character with this fic so far. Again, very nice opening and plot setup, I'm eager to see more of this soon ^_^
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Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 12-03-2005, 04:54 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kashima - 12-03-2005, 05:06 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Hayami - 12-03-2005, 02:15 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Karasu Murder - 12-03-2005, 05:46 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 13-03-2005, 04:17 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Karasu Murder - 13-03-2005, 06:14 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Hayami - 13-03-2005, 12:28 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 17-03-2005, 10:55 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Karasu Murder - 18-03-2005, 12:13 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Teh EkwEE - 18-03-2005, 12:42 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Hayami - 18-03-2005, 02:55 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 20-03-2005, 10:54 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kashima - 20-03-2005, 11:05 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Hayami - 21-03-2005, 09:51 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Karasu Murder - 31-03-2005, 05:46 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 01-04-2005, 04:30 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 01-04-2005, 04:31 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kashima - 02-04-2005, 05:53 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Hayami - 02-04-2005, 06:47 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Karasu Murder - 07-04-2005, 01:23 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kisanzi - 08-04-2005, 12:28 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Aroth - 10-04-2005, 06:45 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Kashima - 10-04-2005, 10:23 PM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Talim009 - 15-04-2005, 06:42 AM
Finally, My PSO Fan-fic - by Hayami - 14-04-2005, 05:19 PM

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