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Chaos, The Fallen One
#1
Pioneer2Log#13...
I am starting this journal to record my story. I was onboard Pioneer1. I am the only survivor of the strange explosion. My parents are dead. My friends are dead. The government keeps me in the hunters' district. They gave me a licensce. Section ID: Redria. Class Type: HUmar. Level: 158.
Enough formal stuff. I was found huddled up in the corner of the forest. A pack of savage wolves came and guarded me. I was found by a group of hunters. They brought me onboard this ship. I was told by the principle that as I was being medically treated I kept screaming "The Darkness!" I have no Idea what this means now, but something terrified me. We must leave Ragol now.
End Log...
Pioneer2Log#13
My name... I do not know my name. But on this strange weapon I was found with was printed the word: Chaos. The weapon is a large sword type weapon... I call myself Chaos after the seal on that strange black sword...
Someone, please help me. I must know the truth. I am going into those strange ruins. I must find why I fear the darkness so much... The medical examiner is coming. She's nice(beautiful) I hope our friendship grows.
End Log...
[Image: shadowcouncilwq0.jpg]
[COLOR="Purple"]How the storm it fulfills, My heart though unhealed, Celestial knives ebonied' And wild woods thrill Yet far fiercer still Her lustre eviscerates me...
I am HE the crowned and conquering Darkness...[/COLOR]
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#2
thats really short should add on to it bro but otherwise i think its ok
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#3
I plan to make more chapters, BRO!
[Image: shadowcouncilwq0.jpg]
[COLOR="Purple"]How the storm it fulfills, My heart though unhealed, Celestial knives ebonied' And wild woods thrill Yet far fiercer still Her lustre eviscerates me...
I am HE the crowned and conquering Darkness...[/COLOR]
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#4
Really good, I love the way you have used logs like a kind of diary entry, many famous noves use this technique (The woman in white, cure you english lit!)

I think this could go really well, try to research some wider vocabulary and you have it in the bag.
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#5
your talented
Guess what I told him before I shot him:
"If you don't quit...
yeah, if you don't stop...
yeah, I'm lettin' my gat pop...
cuz it's one-eight-seven on an undercover cop!!"
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#6
Chaos, The Fallen One V.2 is coming soon. (soon as I get around to doing it)
[Image: shadowcouncilwq0.jpg]
[COLOR="Purple"]How the storm it fulfills, My heart though unhealed, Celestial knives ebonied' And wild woods thrill Yet far fiercer still Her lustre eviscerates me...
I am HE the crowned and conquering Darkness...[/COLOR]
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